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| Giraffe 63 2006-06-10 ch 1,   | Wow, this was really chilling but so true. I like how you separated the stanzas, I think it helped give the poem a strong effect. Great job. |
| Decollage 2006-04-23 ch 1, | The best kind of poetry is the kind that strikes a chord, and this one made my ribcage rattle. If I don't leave now I'll divert the focus and rant on the subject matter, rather than cry for the meaning. |
| burn our city 2006-03-28 ch 1, | good poem. very good. it is definately a shame that we often forget about the people over in Africa. |
| rballard 2006-03-28 ch 1, | i really like this. its really powerful and moving. |
| Seraph Strike 2006-03-27 ch 1, | I feel like the last stanza wraps this one up excellently. Strong figurative language makes this piece unique and makes me feel actually guilty that I'm not changing the world. Great job, keep writing! |
| beti213 2006-03-24 ch 1, | :-o makes me feel like **. and also like ** because I'm not going to go change someone's life right now. brilliantly written. |
| The Postscript 2006-03-24 ch 1, | Wonderful...I wrote an essay called Just Feed One about oppression, mostly that affecting Darfur, Sudan. And this summer I'll be posting a whole collection of poetry about oppression to help rise world awareness...some people just don't know. This is a beautiful poem and you capture that feeling well...we are so lucky here. I love your summary - numbers are so lifeless. This - this poetry - is what makes those inanimate numbers real. Thanks for writing this. You've got God's heart. Keep writing. |