excellent twist at the end. Kinda punched right through me. Wasnt expecting it. Nice use of rhythm.

oh wow. way to turn things around. haha. I like the story in this poem a lot. It's very realistic and probably happens to some poeple. not necessarily the van part, but the arguments. Awesome!

That was excellent! The melancholy atmosphere, put together with the faint hope in stanza four (which is very good, by the way), is totally shattered by those last two lines. I was not expecting that! Congratulations--it is difficult to write such an original poem these days.

Wow, that ending was excellent! I was not expecting that ending. Great job!

Very warped interpretation of love... but very well written, I think. Kind of disturbing, but not in a bad way, if that makes any kind of sense...