Wow. That was absolutely gripping, from beginning to end. The irony made it all the better, in the end, yet it was so sad! The poor girl... blaming herself for the conflict between her parents and her sister...

Your writing style is also very impressive. It's very easy to read, yet there seems to always be something hidden behind each word. You've clearly taken the time to develop and polish this story - it's very evident, and I commend you for that.

Also, I noticed your "takes" on writing, in your profile, and I have to say a huge thanks for sharing them. It's always nice to exchange that kind of advice, so that we can all keep those things in mind when we write. Thanks for the insight, and wonderful job on this story!

-- J.max

omg that story was chilling. that is really really sad. i love how you made it from a child's point of view, when everything is still so simple.

the newspaper article at the end just finishes it perfectly, you really made your point there. thanks for posting that story, it was really really good! :)

I was just about review this as you reviewed mine... You're too fast

This has really pulled on my heartstrings. There is so much irony, dramatic irony I would call it, in that newspaper article.

Please write more like this - I love the twist as immense joy ends in emotional agony