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| Princess-anna57 2006-03-24 ch 1, | Amazing song. Like it lots! Write on! ~Anna~ |
| Lynn Clarke 2006-03-24 ch 1, | That doesn't sound forced at all! I loved it. Don't change a thing, okay? |
| emeraude-irlandais 2006-03-24 ch 1, | The amazing, echoing bella. I say this because your author's note is right, it does sound forced except for the chorus. The bridge is actually good though (that is what you call it, right?? I'm so bad with songs, I write freeform poetry, so you can't blame me...well, you can, but...). Maybe if you started over, and tried to freshen it up a little..God, I have no clue what I'm blathering about. xD I liked the chorus though, keep writing!`~Bella~` |