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| Written 2006-03-29 ch 1,   | lovely job. the form is pretty and I love the parenthetical notes and just GUH. everything. awesome images. |
| coldsunlight 2006-03-27 ch 1, | i love the last bit... really reminding me of my current "situation", only i wish on bridges. & railroad tracks. & the moon. & planes. plus you like mitch hedburg, which is a surefire way to get me to fall in love with you. |
| It Sounds Horrible 2006-03-26 ch 1, | I never thought of a star blinking like a heartbeat, it's a very good opening. Also clever with "ec(lips)es", I never noticed that. Clever. |
| boys kiss girls 2006-03-26 ch 1, | Sheesh... took me long enough to find you again *glares*. This is a really sweet poem (its "saweet" too =P) you went new account happy, didnt you? |
| chaos called creation 2006-03-25 ch 1, | phrased oh so very well. the first stanza is my favourite though. makes me think of a party in heaven or something. |
| Aquafied 2006-03-25 ch 1, | on the eclipses insert, is eces a word? just thinking you know, i saw one of the prettiest skies from the inside. |
| breezy nostrils 2006-03-25 ch 1, | wow so many powerful lines. I love the imagery you evoked in this. nice work. |
| e a t i n g . f l o w e r s 2006-03-24 ch 1, | oh pretty first stanza. I liked the whole heartbeat idea. Very nice. I really liked this. So keep it up! |
| sunday night sky 2006-03-24 ch 1, | aww this has beautiful imagery. the last stanza is amazing, i love the parenthesis, especially (lips). great job! |
| coal and marigolds 2006-03-24 ch 1, | Very pretty. I love how you said the star was blinking like a heartbeat. That's such a cool way to put it. |
| Moondog Dozier 2006-03-24 ch 1, | This elicits a real floating feeling, and yet it is grounded in reality. Wonderful word choice, and sound work. Good write. |
| ode to a firefly 2006-03-24 ch 1, | Yup, that's basically what I was thinking while we were sitting out there...if he was missing me as much as I was missing him. =P I like how you formatted the title, it looks awesome. ~Christine~ |