Like the brackets idea, and the enjambment.

Such contrast, unreal concepts and reality...

It makes me quite sad, actually. :(

Beautifully abstract and free style. Love the whole feel of it and your choice of words. Well done.

Wow, it's been a long time since you posted here! _ This is really beautiful, I love the second stanza, especially the last three lines. Very cool poem!

Much love, Rosanna.

heyy... thanks 4 the review :) awesome poem. your words really create a beautiful masterpiece in our minds. Perfect metaphor... perfect poem...

great job :)Em

Vivid piece. Nicely done.

I love this. So visual and emotional. It makes me smile as well.

Kepe it up.

amazing imagery with the shattered heart

This was sweet. Very nice metaphor. Aww I wish I had someone like that. (

This is so beautiful! The imagery is really great and I love the ending. Great work! Thank you for the reviews you've left me! V x

hum...this ones kinda weird. i like the crashing into the heart thing...but the ending idk maybe its just me but it didnt seem to fit good start tho

gorgeous imagery...i love it.

my only words to this is oh my god its amazing. lve it.

Very nice write

¿Big gun or fast car,—which is more deadly?

I'd say a car on any given day,

Momentum builds up and can only swerve,

Once at speed its direction has taken,

Like a massive river surging to sea,

That once rivulet could not move boulders,

Now rolls mountains down to alluvium;

So two hearts form lightning from sky to earth,

That with intensity sears all in path,

An energy consuming and consumed,

A eucharist of life that fate deems needs,

For its release and crash like meteor,—

Is in God's universe of form divine,

Black chaos that burning stars inhabit,

Before they Nova and burst in fireworks,

To dandelion seed new worlds and moons,

Like love that struck its mortal collision.

p.s. It's great you're posting!

p.p.s. myno is myno. i miss her writing, but that's another story.

p.p.p.s. email me and i'll explain the other question you asked.

Howie Day Collide is a beautiful song... I've got two different recordings of it and listen to them regularly. :) This poem has an interesting rhythm to it, and I like the images.