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Reviews For: Hero's Heart

Captain Lucky 2007-01-26 ch 3,	Unbelievable. I'm going to say it again: Unbelievable. Wow. You're lucky I don't swear or this review would be full of nasty words of praise for your untouchable, remarkable talent. The songs, the characters, the story in general is amazing! I got shivers going up and down my spine just reading about the place. I'm not joking or anything, I swear. I wanted to be there, it was so perfect in your description. Um...more? I never agreed to that deal. When and if I post more of that thing you want (I don't understand why you want my dirty-laundry-of-a story - you have some mental disorder or something) it will be when you've posted at least some portions of the umpteen chapters you owe me and which I desperately crave. ;P CL
Captain Lucky 2007-01-25 ch 2,	Yikes! There's no pleasing you people, is there?! First you get on my b/c I don't finish and then you get on my b/c I don't finish the way you want it... But now to the really purpose of this review, which is to praise your better-than-perfect gift as a writer: wow. I like this. It was rather intense and I like how you tie so many characters together an effect of this one event. Yeah, you need to keep posting this - and it's not fair to say that whenever I post one, you'll post one. No way. I posted 19 in one day. You posted 1. You still owe me and if you don't want my soul to rot away completely from longing - if you care about me at all in any way, shape or form - you'll post the next 18 or so for me asap! Excellent story! Plz continue =) CL
Captain Lucky 2006-03-27 ch 1,	W-O-W! Me encanta, you little genious. Yet another intoxicating story (wow, I made a big word!) I can't wait to see more of this (and I know there's more, so you'd better post it!) :P
Loveless To Self 2006-03-24 ch 1,	All in all not bad. there SEEMS to be enough detail as I never lost track of what was going on, but then again the chapter was a little short to lose track of anything. That's my complaint: That chapter said what it needed to say, which is great especially for an opening, but for this story to work, your chapters are going to have to be a lot longer. I'll add this to my alert list and see how it progresses. Good Luck
Duece of Spades 2006-03-24 ch 1,	This prolouge really caught my interest. It doesn't say a whole lot about the characters of Jaret and Inthem, but it gives enough information to keep the reader interested in finding out who they are and why their rivalry is going to be shaping the world 800 years later. The only thing I would comment on is that your dialog seems kind of strained. There's only two speakers in the entire piece, so "Jaret said" or "Inthem said" aren't really needed after the first clarification of who said what. Still, great begining. I hope you don't get discouraged, and keep writing this story. ^_^V

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