Once again... SO GOOD! and this one rhymes! yay!

this is really. good,deep.

and i was only wondering cause it seemed like it was refering to a boy i wasnt sure.

I liked this piece. The rhyming came off as a bit stilted, but it still made my heart pang. I really like the whole bottom of the bottomless sea bit, it really captured that ever sinking feeling.

I'd suggest reworking the spacing of it, so it's all together or broken into the stanzas you want. The spread out text seemed to take away from the piece. (For me anyway)

Overall a really good read. Good job!

This sounds like it could be a song! It's really good. Write on!

~Anna~

i like the rhymes...and the metaphors...although i sense a bit of immaturity...

truly yours...