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Reviews For: Areola

Decollage 2006-04-23 ch 1,	The title is perfect- it may be slightly unartistic or unorthodox, but the second definition seemed to fit equally as well as the first. I can never think up something meaningful enough for the content, but the last stanza is my favorite.
gold against the soul 2006-04-07 ch 1,	'Introduction; pleased to hate you,we will label and debate you.' So true. This is a really good poem, I love the irony and sarcasm and stuff. And I like the way you started with areola and managed to make it relevent! - gold against the soul
Blue Jellee 2006-04-01 ch 1,	When i read the title, I was like .. "a poem about NIPPLES?!?!" XD. But yeah.. apparently areola has two meanings lmao. Anyways, yeah. Great poem, i love the style of your writing.
T. Rowland 2006-03-30 ch 1,	As being the case with late to review, many before have said what I would have. You are extremely talented. Every line, the word selection, the imagery, the imagination, utterly sticks with me. There are loads of good reads around here, but you, mate, stand out. Sorry, not much critique, but just some genuine praise.
Calligrapher of Hearts 2006-03-26 ch 1,	This is quite dark Unca. Amazingly well-written, though! One of your more articulate pieces. Loved it! xxhXixx
she's not breathing 2006-03-25 ch 1,	absolutely love it. heart&soul. especially the hintHINT of m/m. so powerful. ~kait
breezy nostrils 2006-03-25 ch 1,	i'm not sure how to take this poem. but there were definitely multiple meanings. I mix you into my dreams, we do as we please - lovely lines. and the last few line were great too. nice work.
Aquafied 2006-03-25 ch 1,	Introduction; pleased to hate you,-the ending, is quite clever and cruel. i very much like that. and i actually looked up the word to end and have it pre-defined. that is nice, the one time i do look a word up.oh dear (what kind of headlining is being suggested?)
Faithless Juliet 2006-03-25 ch 1,	(But with beauty in the wounds of the beholder, I count myself lucky to be so dangerous) That is so unbelievably amazing; the wounds part is so true. We all hurt ourselves in one way or another, some people scar the outside and others scar the inside. I just wrote a poem (still in the stages of pre-production) where I’m going along the point of other girl’s hurt themselves with razors and knifes, and I don’t but sometimes I wonder about it. (I might post it next week) but this is so true and so amazing - you don’t really strike me as the dangerous type though - it’s the smoothness of your narrations maybe - I see you more of the wise, too easily entangled with type of person. (I mix you into my dreams, we do as we please) Let me just say that I love the power of that - to do as you please, (I love it when you talk like that) but also I think there is something missing in that - like a period after dreams, or maybe an “AND” before we. Something in there, it doesn’t feel whole the way it is. Introduction; pleased to hate you (pre conceived notions of people, I know within five seconds of meeting someone whether I‘m going to hate them or love them), we will label and debate you (I so feel that, in life and in writing, I‘ve been labeled, you‘ve been labeled, we‘ve all been labeled something. And it‘s such an artificial tasting, like only listening to one type of music when clearly any given person can be into and make many different types. The debate part was amazing to, I have to say that I love to debate with people, I love to put them on the edge of something and watch them either get up and walk away or fall off - it‘s some kind of sick/lovable pleasure - that and I have this complex where I‘m always right.). I fold him into my needs (I‘ve done that with people before); we do as we please. (I‘m torn about your “do as we pleases” I love them so don‘t get rid of them, but I also think they stand alone to much to have commas before them.) Areola (Drop dead sexy.) So I read your some of your sisters poetry and I was a bit shocked at how different your two styles were (I guess I was thinking of some kind of mirror or twin-like aspect since your siblings) but I was pleasantly surprised, she’s very forthright and your very fluid. Quite interesting between the two of you. Juliet.
xHannahx 2006-03-25 ch 1,	hmm.. i didnt really see the nipple thing in the poem, but the AN kinda helped :P i really liked the last four lines, theyre really strong. good stuff :D Han.
mez lavenderfoxdaisy 2006-03-25 ch 1,	'magnets would know the feeling' wow the power in this is brilliant exhilarating...you have a particular trademark in your writing and although th style changes there's that superior perceptiveness about it which draws readers in...esp me!like the idea of this- split between two halves very familiar yet new in its exciting form and who its been structured it's politics put in many beautiful words

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