i like the way this piece builds up to the climatic release...the use of words like "music swells" and "Gentle crescendoing" are especially effective here. do keep writing :D

No I don't have any suggestions specifically, the diction can't be faulted. Maybe a little more punctuation would help clarify the meanings, as much as it's attractive in a conscious-stream-of-thought kind of way, it's a little all-melting-into-one too. There's a balance. Nice work though, great read.