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jessee parker 2007-06-27 ch 1,	I love this. I love your work! It's so amazing and fantastic! Really. The way your words just flow and how sometimes they can make perfect sense and no sense at the same time. I love your subtle rhymes and alliteration and all your little tricks and trills that go together so well. And this is one of my favorites. But really, keep writing. I've already read every single piece and I await more anxiously. I just posted some on this new account and if you could review something of mine sometime it would be so greatly appreciated. ciao.
faking closure 2006-04-16 ch 1,	blah. i absolutely love this, it's amazing. -naomi PS: i wish i didnt suck at reviews, hah
dancingintherain 2006-04-10 ch 1,	this is one of your best poems- the imagery was just beautiful and i loved your creative and interesting analogies to emotions and events that happened to you- like the line "the porcelain cracks accumulating in the tragedies" that says your not perfect either- but most of all i really really liked how despite it all at the end you mention the paper crane- kind of like a little bit of hope...i really loved this! nice job.
boys kiss girls 2006-04-02 ch 1,	I can relate to this piece. Most people don't realize how attatched a girl (or guy, for that matter) can become to their long hair. It holds the owner's own history. After it's long and it gets cut off, you feel like you've lost your identity. I really liked the part where you said it got caught on chairs, lockers, and such... yeah, that sucks. Anyway, this is a really good poem. (Who would've thought I could leave such a long review on a poem about hair... or that such a good poem could be written about hair? Not me).
Moondog Dozier 2006-03-31 ch 1,	I like the rushing detail of this. It makes interesting connections with the unique phrasing. Not sure I quite get the overall picture, but it is presented with such specifically unusual wording that it was an interesting read. Well done with the pace and detail.
degenerate elite rabbit 2006-03-28 ch 1,	really cool work here. gotta admit you are so much better at this than i am really. awesome and man it read like being shot through the universe light speed. neat!-rabbit
classic violet 2006-03-28 ch 1,	Vivid. Beautiful. Picture perfect. My God, this is gorgeous. I especially love: "of childhood angst residing in black bullet notebooks" Fantastic job!
Vivian Rose Pierce 2006-03-27 ch 1,	Very beautiful. Wonderfully writen.
Matthew James Current 2006-03-26 ch 1,	Your comment was an joy that I received with honor / a quick blessed stitch / helping mend the slow healing wound of an artist / craving to be heard, to be known / to be felt / to reach out and feel / someone reaching back. Sorry, but I just had to try and mimic the style a little bit even if I can't really. It ran a bit long, but was so completely and utterly worth the read I have no complaints whatsoever. This is poetry meant to be read aloud, to be felt and heard. The kind that resonates in the ears and in the heart. Lovely, thank you so much for your time and for leaving me a much happier poet. A shining star left me a message so I had to return the favor ^_^
e a t i n g . f l o w e r s 2006-03-25 ch 1,	So interesting...definatly one that I'll have to read again to appreciate all the layers to it. There are so many good lines and words in this. Far too many to quote. So I'll have to skip this time. Keep it up!
dark stars grace 2006-03-25 ch 1,	what an interesting poem, to have time measured by-well,-hair! never thought of it before, how original. beautifully portrayed, and i love the underlying message that it's so important. just like little girls worried about pigtails. well done.
she's not breathing 2006-03-25 ch 1,	absolutely gorgeous imagery. i am very jealous but too calm from reading this to act on it. ~kait
breezy nostrils 2006-03-25 ch 1,	i don't know why but this really reminds me of faithless juliet's style. (i'm not sure whether that was intentional) anyway, love the line - inserting a mouthful of childhood angst residing in black bullet notebooks - i can relate to that line so much cause i still have old diaries from when i was 12. so many great lines. so little time. nice work.
in theory 2006-03-25 ch 1,	The whole way you presented this is completely untouchable. I especially liked the "seashell porcupine" part, there's not many poets I know of who could use those words ligitimately in a piece.
clockwork kiss 2006-03-25 ch 1,	wow. that was very well-written. i love the stream of consciousness feel, and especially how despite that, you still keep the hair theme all the way to the end. there were some great phrases in here! "with inky locks gagged into the skeleton throat" - really liked the "gagged" usage. it just grabs the reader because it is just slightly out of context. the ending is seriously gorgeous (i love it), but i would have tied the last line back to the hair again. anyways. this was a fabulous piece. i'm definitely gonna favorite it.

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