i like the broken up feel to this, whether it was intentional or not, it works =P

it's poignant and very realistic, i like it =] super awesome job ^_^

you know what, this is just as wonderful as your others.
and i love it.
but heres a word you might like if you ever write something like this again... ricochet. it just seems like it would fit when you talk about guns and such.

Very descriptive, nice word choice. This is good, I like it.

Amazing feel to this one. I can definitely imagine this scene perfectly. Good Job!

How real, how tragic. The detailed description helped me visualize what was happening, and convey the hopeless fealing of despair and defeat that is so powerfully present in this poem. Great job, especially the two questions, and also the last seven lines--masterfully done.