This is a good story. I like the concept of the light beings (angels? demons? spirits?) and the rich and descriptive language that you right in. I'll try to read more. Your spelling is perfect and your grammer near flawless.

Wow. This is the best fantasy, written by a thirteen-year old I've read. Your writing is incredible with the right blend of descriptive parts, dialogue parts and just a seamless flow of all the elements of literature. I'm not a fantasy person but this is a very smooth flowing one--no complicated, unprounceable (sp?) names, not overly and excessively descriptive that it bores the reader to an early death. It's engaging with a blend of historical, supernatural, fntasy, action-adventure and I suspect romance, soon enough.And seriously, when you're done and edited..send it to Miramax Books (published Flavia Bujor, another teen author), or Random House or some other broad-minded publisher! Great work!

love this story-*adds to faves.It needs editing-but it's a first draft so that's expected.

I think Rolan is fave character, so far, apart from Sitara

sigh-the trials and tribulations of school!

I love that name-Blackburn-he he lol. I'm weird. They don't call me the Mad Hatter for nothing.

I love the Victorian era! Awesome story.

Now this is starting to make sense. I know where your going with this. Good writing, you got me hooked!!

Keep on writing!

Hmm...I don't see where the story is going so far, but I'll trust your writing. You have incredible style.

all the characters seem so real and interesting. Mr. Drakus-loathe him already.

I loved it-it's so well-written! Kinda scary too.

amazing, exhilrating start. Interesting opening.

Hey! Your story is really good, I love the plot! Keep it up- I can't wait for more chapters. You are really good at making characters, they seem very defined. Stay as brilliant as you are, and thanks for reviewing my story- otherwise I might never have found yours!

I have only read the first chapter, but so far I like it. I think you are a bit too comma happy, though. I saw a few unnessecary commas. Thanks for reviewing my story. It's the first short story I've finished. I'm going to go finish the rest of your story now. I'll expect some more good stuff from you :)