Reviews for The Worthy Part Inside

ashley m.c 2006-03-26 ch 2,	I am an English geek so the first thing I am going to say is: you have some small grammar and punctuation problems that are sort of distracting. Also, the dialogue seems a little TOO primitive. Lastly, there is alot of "showing" and not "telling." But I am interested in where it goes.
Ixchella Samara 2006-03-25 ch 2,	aww, poor alice! nice job. thanks for reviewing my story.