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PM20 2006-09-10 ch 1,	I don't have a twin, but I wish one of my siblings would dedicate something is wonderful to me. Beautiful work. Thank you for sharing.
yspgirl 2006-08-02 ch 1,	your poetry is so delicate while speaking of really heavy things... it's amazing really. this is one of my favorites.
citrus scented 2006-07-30 ch 1,	this piece makes me want to add you too my favourites list. your writing is just so delicate...its sad. its beautiful, the emotion seems to break through it. i dont know what else i can say: "like a newborn flower"..."your life drains out of the corner of your lips"
classic violet 2006-05-29 ch 1,	wow, I simply love this. I had a twin, but sadly I never knew her. gorgeous poem.
britt 2006-05-07 ch 1,	i never felt so close to this piece as i do today. today... i learned something. i just wish i could express it as beautifully and brilliantly as you do. i was to screamwritebleedcrytearapart yet i cannot write it down. nehoos, take care, m'dear. i love this poem
Yza Zaz 2006-04-27 ch 1,	What an epitaph ! Wow...What can I say ? I've lost my words somewhere while I was reading it ^^
in theory 2006-04-13 ch 1,	One thing your work instantly reminds me of (visually/formatwise) is poetic abortion's. And I only say that because I came across her first..I don't know whose work looks like whose really. But it works on the eye, so it's irrelevant anyway. Found you through goet loet/whatever she's calling herself nowadays, I've definitely read you before though... The first stanza; is a little too dynamic, love IS etc...it feels strong (which is good but not if the reader disagrees.) It's violent and graphic and sums up the nasty, failed side of true love quite accurately. I wouldn't go as far as saying that it's the wholeness of it though. A newborn flower is pretty. The amount of &s in this is a little annoying after awhile, if you said it in a conversation it would sound a little bizarre. People would mistake you for rambling. (it looks pretty but I like to read poetry out loud and it does spoil it a smidge). Your life draining out of the corner of your lips...love that metaphor, it's very sexual. I like how the final stanza brings together the flower references earlier, it ties the piece up nicely. Overall, cool piece, thoughtful and all the rest. Feels maybe a little overdramatic to be totally credible, but that's probably because I'm in a happy-fool mood and don't connect with this yet (wait till I'm moodyblack again, it happens so yeah next time you'll probably get a more positive review). truly
bleed gilead 2006-04-06 ch 1,	wow, this is different. hm. maybe i'm just weirded out not having lots and lots of parenthesis and bolding and the like staring at me. which is cool. my eyes like it. okay, moving on. i love the first stanza, "betrayal blowing your veins apart" and how it translates to psuedo-physical reality. and how you follow up, it's all surreal and yet you still communicate the images of a broken relationship, the speaker in love and thus breaking.
My New Pen Name 2006-04-02 ch 1,	Hauntingly beautiful. I love it!"to hughim whole again, whileyour life drains out of the corner of your lips."Amazingamazing.: D
Doray 2006-03-30 ch 1,	I like the way you unfold each idea through those meaningful words. It's so heartwarming.
clockwork kiss 2006-03-27 ch 1,	i like it way better when you don't format it. it cheapens everything when you use as much as you usually do. sorry, but that's just my opinion. either way, -this- poem is very cool, and the idea is well projected. if you just amped up the vocabulary a little to put a different spin on things, it would be amazing. i really love the last stanza, though. that's probably perfect as is. the petals usage is awesome. nice write.
contrast and friction 2006-03-27 ch 1,	You're right - the formatting would detract from the power of this piece. It's perfect just the way it is. The intensity in this just keeps on building up & in the final stanza it finally reaches breaking point and just bleeds from your words .. and I absolutely love it, the final stanza is by far my fave.This is just beautiful.
Hotkitty 2006-03-26 ch 1,	i read some of your reviews for the other poem. its nothing to do with you not being normal so dont insult me by even thinking that. iknow plenty of people who're right ** in the head and it doesnt bother me at all. my auntz a schizo with ocd and i know what its like for her and i wouldnever judge her according to that or judge anyone according to something like that sodontyouever think that. and tell some of your reviewers that they need to eff off and donttheydare judge me based on a poem. once again, it hurts that you would write about me like that (im getting redundant by now, arent i?) and make me look like the bad guy, yet again. because im always the bad guy with everyone. i should be used to it by now, right?and i bet you're still laughing because the laughter becomes you oh-so-well especially when its directed at me cause im just the easy target. once again, your telling the truth on how you realli feel. well done. andihope you're proud of yourself. i'll stop now. because im rambling. but, of course, i bet you figured that one out, too, with your oh-so-awesome psych.
by His blood 2006-03-26 ch 1,	you're right about the formatting, how it would lessen the effect, because this is just amazing without any extra details. this is just so haunting and so sad, i literally had to hold back tears. and the ending was just so beautiful, all of this was really. you just expressed so much and i really think i'm going to cry now. this is just ... i can't say how much i loved this. just. wow.
The Melancholy Astronaut 2006-03-25 ch 1,	Sweet and saddening and painful and powerful.

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