Your writting is seriously really good. This one was relaly moving and I love the format and the repetition.

it's very good, longing for somthing better is what i got out of it. but i have a question, are you dating a girl, and are you a girl, i didnt read your profile so i dont know.

Flows like a song. I can hear the repeated words ("...laugh,/laugh." "...see,/see.") as an echo.

Very nice. I enjoyed it.

This is simply elegant and strikingly beautiful. This seems truly heartfelt and I congratulate you on a job well done! Keep writing!