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| Left On The Shelf 2006-06-17 ch 1,  | abuseAmazing. Simply captivating. |
| Jezsh 2006-05-16 ch 1, | abuseInteresting piece. I like the feeling of it having two voices, it sort of makes me think absolute vs. subjective. Very intuitive, and I like that a lot. |
| Frore 2006-05-15 ch 1, | abuseYeah, let's break that p.o.s. I'm tired of counting my second, one by one... You're very creative, and don't worry about that little 'slump' you mentioned in your profile - we all hit those. Usually all it takes is a few interesting words to get me into gear, maybe you're the same way? |
| HeartSongMusicLyric 2006-04-23 ch 1, | abuseI love the message to this poem, and i understand the common fear of running out of time (life, death, is it really my time question). I love that you used an hourglass as a metaphor for your poem. it's obvious, but totally relevant and a great reference for this type of poem/message...Great job! |
| Nanao Nagase 2006-04-20 ch 1, | abuseI like this poem, it really helps me think about life... I think I'll shatter the hourglass if I can... |
| classic violet 2006-04-08 ch 1, | abusesymbolic like, i love it. |
| Smoky Bear 2006-04-02 ch 1, | abusethoughtful, well crafted and fantastic... i wish i could break the glass. |
| lionessrampant 2006-03-28 ch 1, anon. | abusewow, this is great. one of your best poems i reckon. it has an awesome idea to it (i could so analyse this) and it is written so perfectly. the only part i dont get/like is the lines: 'and we’re always wondering why we let him lead us away without a fightlistening to him whisper ‘the hourglass has spoken’ i don't understand why they came into the poem - although i do like the personification (hee!) of the hourglass speaking. it was rather effective for me.apart from that, i love this so much. everything was written so perfectly. (can i have your autograph?) |
| HiddenFlame42 2006-03-27 ch 1, | abuseOne word - AMAZING! |
| Moondog Dozier 2006-03-26 ch 1, | abuseI like the voice in this. Very strong and self-assured. Great concept of personal empowerment. Well done. |
| Playing Games 2006-03-26 ch 1, | abuseThis is one of the best poems I've ever read, and I'm being completely and seriously honest. The use of italics on the end of lines made the whole thing very powerful, and the very last line made me blink several times. |