awesome piece. kind of wanting to find yourself but not want to at the same time. wanting to get away from the true flesh-and-bone self.

nice.

I could only hope to be as talented or as hard-working as you.

Every time I get the chance, I come to my favorite authors list and see what other works they have done that I have no read yet. Ever since I read “All I Am”, I have been afraid to see any more of your work for that one piece cut me so deep that it left me sitting here for hours thinking and hurting and feeling everything possible. I was amazed and dumbfounded beyond my wildest imagination. Now that I have worked up the courage to read more, I am very glad I did so.

This one, is great. Not quite as great as “All I Am” in my opinion, but great never the less. It tells how hard it is to find ourselves, yet even at the loss of finding, we can never get away from it. For most, I believe it takes up our lives. In the end, I think we shall never truly understand ourselves. My hope is that is what a soul-mate does, and I cannot wait.

Excuse my blathering. Well done, very well done.

As Always,

Eve

Nice poem. Great stuff you've got here, keep writing! :)♥sarah

I like the emotion and pinpoint on certain color.

each word has such meaning! i love the way it seems to flow from the very start its very, very good!

I like it. The idea of almost physically trying to cut yourself away from yourself. Love the imagry of the flesh. GOOD WORK!

This is a pretty cool concept...I like the idea of cutting yourself away. Nice imagery on the pink flesh and white bone. I like the varied line structure too. My one suggestion would be to use more images; descriptions would be more thought-provoking than abstract concepts. Other than that, this is good.

Yours in writing,~pointythings

this is not so very well written, but it has feeling and message. Getting away from yourself seems to be only your exterior goal.

it seems as if the narrator is trying to run from their thoughts/mind good job i like this

pointless? "I can't cut myself away" - if that's your idea of pointless i am so disgusted. hah. you are such a good writer. love this.

~kait