interesting is a word that suits this poem strongly, being that i am fascinated by Adam&Eve and the Creation of everything this poem suited this obssession-ish infatuation with poems dealing with the subject. this, on the other hand, was a completely new feat of beauty, of originality; thiis poem is beautiful, simply stated.

(one thing irked me though, the repitition was kinda forced, i think you should use that as sparingly as possible as...you know, sometimes it isn't as pretty (but in tghis it was almost perfect).)

~* noelle

The imagery in this is fabulous! Love the 'creeping back' repetition and the description of the cherubim. (Certainly not what's shown on the greeting cards! ;) The last lines are just wonderfully wrenching.

Very vivid. Usually I don't get into religious poems (sort of apathetic about the whole subject, actually) but this was an interesting read.

-pictographic.love