i love your metaphors, extremely creativewickedly delicious ideas

aww, do you intend to leave this as a one-shot? I'd like to see it turned into a storey. I like the girl, Pet, whatever her name is. she's coolness.

awesome story! you have some great talent here man! really good work!cheers-rabbit

I love this! so well written! Chilling. I hope it has more chapters!

Great piece! A little morbid, but still great.

Great story! I especially the ending. Very dark )

Wonderful story. Very dark and a bit morbid. Great work!

Whoah. This is dark...

Hey! I like vampires! I once wrote a play on vampires! I like the protaganist...she seems promising. :-) I hope you write more like this...The movement's really very cool. The story just flows..

I like. :-)

Bambam

Oh that was a great story. Deliciously dark. Heh someone's gonna get what they deserved...great story you should write more like these.