Wow! That's really good! I loved your word choice and language, it all worked really well and it flowed beautifully. I felt like the end was a tad rushed... I could see this being a longer story rather than a one-shot. I totally want to know what happens next O_O

Short. It was good, a little rushed, but overall pretty descent. I just was running through the manga section and i saw this had no reviews. So I gave you one. Nice on the writing atleast. I thought it was funny that your friend's charachter's last name was Kismet. A charachter in my new manga story is named Kizmet.

Odd coincidence. I laughed. It reminded me too much of what happened last year. Favorites list, here you go