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Amy 2008-07-21 ch 35, anon.	abuseI am so excited that it is finally finished! For almost two years I've been addicted, anxiously awaiting the next chapter to appear. I love what you did with the story. The ending was truly amazing. Kudos!
GossamerHeart 2008-07-20 ch 35, anon.	abuseHair. Cut. O_O Brilliant ending. :) applause
Jazzy Kitty 2008-07-18 ch 35,	abuseHey you! I know you finished this like... couple weeks ago? I'm so sorry I disappeared yet AGAIN. Inexcusable, I know. First let me say that I absolutely loved the ending. You did get me a teensy bit worried there, for the last couple chapters, once school started for Ayah and Drew! haha but I am so glad that Ayah got her happy ending; I think you're right, she definitely deserves it. Okay since I haven't reviewed since... um like chapter 29 apparently (yikes) this is going to be a pretty long review. I'll just skim over the chapters and tell you everything you did in your writing that blew me away :) Chapter 30, Unconditional Love, I think had to be one of the most touching chapters in the story. The interactions between Ayah, her grandma, and Drew, were just so sweet, especially Drew and Gramma. The whole scene where Ayah asked Drew to leave I thought was a great touch even though it broke my heart that Drew disappeared in the story for a little bit! haha he was definitely my favorite character to read about! Chapter 31, The Illusion Broken, very internal but seemed like a great closer for Ayah's personal healing. I thought it was great that we witnessed both her first and last breakdown over her dad in a storm, that made her healing very circular - kudos! After the storm of course, the rest of the chapter was just plain fun to read. I loved this line: "My body still reacted to the sound of his voice; my skin went fuzzy like a peach." Ahh! amazing :) And of course the slumber party between the girls was super fun to read to, a glimpse of Ayah just letting go and having some old fashioned silly fun with her girlfriends! Chapter 32 - adored the passage where Drew tells Ayah that Leta already called "dibs" on her for the first day of school. That was just brilliant; I loved reading their little flirtations and the subtext you inserted here and there. The school chapters, 32 and on, were sometimes like "augh Drew and Addy?" haha but of course we made it to end just fine :) And of course the KISS was perfect, perfect, perfect! yay I was so happy when it finally happened!! haha I can't believe this story is completed! I'm sorry I haven't been reviewing as diligently as I should have :( My fault. You mentioned a new story at the end of the epilogue!! I can't wait to see what you come out with next, as always! Stunning writing on Honourshill, seriously, it was just amazing to read something so well written not just as a romance but as a personal learning experience for Ayah - that added a deeper level to this story that was just amazing. Wonderful job!! -Kit
phoenixtears 2008-07-17 ch 8, anon.	abuseI'm really loving this story so far. I haven't reviewed a story in a long while but I really like this alot. Altho its slow paced I don't really mind that so much anymore which usually I do cuz I'm just dying for the end most times. I'm a sucker for a happy ending. It's very descriptive which I also love cuz it gives me a better feel for Ayah's surroundings and reactions to people. I love her as a character becuz I can sympathize with her and how she views the world and those around her. She isn't very trusting becuz she never has anything she can depend on. Since her dad died its like she's been all ovr the place and not settled and she doesn't know where to call home realli. She is not in a good place right now and during the thunderstorm wen she freaked out it was just very well written I think. I like how ur story has developed and how you take time to consider specific details and how you put each character in certain situations that draw out certin reactions from them. It's fascinating realli. And Ayah may frustrate me sometimes becuz I feel like we're kindred spirits and I see where she's heading and wats she's doing to herself in the story and its like it's kinda like when u watch those scary movies and ur tempted to shout out HEY DON'T GO IN THERE!! but you kno they can't hear you. Yeah. Anyway awesome story. And this is a bit long isn't it lol.
JC Delacy 2008-07-17 ch 1,	abuseSo far I'm interested in the plot, kind of reminds me of me somehow...:P
acidblue 2008-07-16 ch 35,	abusehey!! what a great ending to a great story. I like the fact that it wasn't cliched and cheesy and all that. OH and the first kiss scene was better than expected. good job. well, i guess that's the end of it =( i wont be hearing more of Ayah and Andrew. sobs
Scarlett London 2008-07-15 ch 35,	abuseWow, amazing ending. FINALLY after all the suspense and all the tension Ayah finnaly made a move. i have to admit i was cheering, and laughing and crying the entire time. i honestly believe that this is one of the best stories i have ever read. period. better than most books out there (and trust me i've read A LOT) your characters are real, complex and perfectly imperfect. i loved each and every one of them. i hope you get this published, they would be insane not to. Amazing job, it left me breathless.
AutumnColors 2008-07-10 ch 35,	abuseHey!! I k now that I am super late responding to the update (I've been out of town) but I have a few sugestions, if you want them, if you don't already have more than you can handle :) So email me and tell me if you want some feedback! It'll be pretty detailed. The ending makes me happy, though. I'll leave the rest of the fawning for when you send me that email, as an incentive ;-) Thanks, though, for an amazing story!
anatidaephobiac 2008-07-09 ch 35,	abuseAH!! its done!! i don't even know what to say beyond that i'm completely in love with it and you better get it published and TELL ME when you do because i'll be the first go out and buy one.. or two.. or three ;-) i'll still be here for your newest story as well.. can't wait!! LOVE IT SO MUCH lots of QUACKs for you! Congrats on SUCH an awesome story!
gabriellafaith 2008-07-06 ch 35, anon.	abuseAwesome :) ...But it's over :(
Helixiros 2008-07-05 ch 35, anon.	abuseHoorah, you finished. I commend you for finishing and writing a great story. I loved it because the characters felt so real. You're writing is great.
zeveran 2008-07-04 ch 35,	abuseI love this story. You are an amazingly talented writer and I hope you post a new story for me and your other fans to enjoy. I must say, you did a great job creating the personalities for Ayah and Drew. I immediately fell in love with Drew when he was first introduced. I could picture him clearly in my head and I hope we have similar ideas on how he looks. I love how he is so observant and artistic. I, too, am an artist but I wish I were more observant like you designed Drew to be. This story made me cry on many different occasions. I could actually feel the pain that Ayah went through after her father died and when she was finally coming to terms with his death. It seemed so real. It was as though her sorrow was radiating off the words and through the computer monitor's screen. I am truly impressed. Readers don't often find stories that don't revolve around baby drama. Your's actually had morals and it wasn't just about cheating boyfriends and back-stabbing best friends like many other stories on this site. I'm glad that I've finally found a story worth reading on this site. I love each one of the characters. Next to Drew and Ayah, Leta is my favorite. I like her personality. Nik, too, is a great character. Poor girl, though. She needs to breath and relax a bit. Question: Do you plan on writing a sequel, with having Ayah and Drew and the gang in college? Or maybe, keeping it here would be better. Heh, I just love the characters, I would love to read them in a new story. I would love to read the redraft so please, post it online. I would, without a doubt, read it and love it. Thank you for writing this amazing story. I enjoyed reading it. Long live Honourshill! Write more, yah? :3
Elley 2008-07-04 ch 35, anon.	abuseI'm so happy that Ayah and Drew got a happy ending. Personally, I don't think there are enough happy ending anymore. It seems people are so afraid that the happy ending is a cliche that I always end up reading sad or bittersweet endings instead. Of course the main character always has growth and becomes a better person, but the end is definitely not labeled as happy. So in my round about way, I'm saying that happy endings aren't so cliche anymore, but a rarity (at least the well written happy endings) and the other routes for endings are currently overrated and over used due to all the avoidance of having a cliche happy ending. In my opinion, nothing is cliche if you do it right and that's what you've done here. Now, about your redraft. I will admit I'm biased and selfish because I want you to post it so I could read it. However, I've been reading some redrafts lately of fics that I enjoy and found that the redrafts do not live up to the original. As much as the author was proud of the new version, I still gravitated to the original because the charm or attraction of story was lost in the redraft. So this is just a thought you might want to consider. This way you can get feedback for your redraft. And when (not if, but when) you get published, you can just remove story from here and point us in the direction of where to buy it. This is something I've seen other authors do too. I would definitely love to have this as a book to read.
pinyourwings 2008-07-02 ch 35,	abuseI just have to tell you how much I adore this story. I suck at reviews, and I think I might have before, I'm not sure, but most likely I have not, which is shameful considering how much this story deserves five million reviews for every single chapter there is. With that said, I think it'd be great if I had the time to give you five million reviews for each chapter, but I hope you won't be angry with me simply reviewing in an overall kind of way. I think that I've been with this story--or, had it on my alerts--since... one of the first few chapters. Honourshill is stunning. I think Honourshill has made me cry more than any other work I've ever read, which is saying something because I read angsty things all the time. Your writing is poetic and lovely and there are so many truths in all of your chapters. I feel like I've grown up with Ayah through the years and that I really connect with her--that I've felt what she has felt. I am so unbelievably happy about the ending. Ayah is the most complex character I've read about in a long time; what I find so strong about Honourshill is that you developed Ayah's character so well, as well as Drew's and some of the minor characters as well. Really, this is truly excellent writing, and I do hope that I see Honourshill on shelves one day! You did an amazing job with it and I honestly cannot tell you anything that I want changed. It's realistic, beautiful, and heartwrenching. Thank you for such an amazing read. Honourshill is definitely one of a kind.
xfail 2008-07-01 ch 1,	abuseFor the past three days I've been reading this story pretty much nonstop, and only now have I just finished it. I know you want people to be constructive and helpful and all but I guess I won't be much help there because all I can give you is praise. I loved this. I really did. I haven't been really involved in anything I've read in a long time and this is exactly what I needed; it's the kind of story you just get emotionally attached to, and all the characters seem truly real. I cried really, REALLY hard at some parts. I could relate to a lot of the themes in this, but even if I couldn't, it wouldn't make reading this any less wonderful. I also envy your character development skills HORRIBLY. If I could do that I would be the happiest person alive, I swear. The whole story is so rich and it all feels so TRUE, like it isn't really fiction at all. If this got published (I think it would be awesome if it did) I would buy it. I promise I would! I'd even pre-order it if I could. You did an amazing job on this. You really did.

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