 Nyghts Dark Desire 2006-05-22 . chapter 1I would have thought a mental sickness as oppsose to a physical one, but this works very well. This is great, I love the last line, esp. |
 InkandIntrospection 2006-05-07 . chapter 1Great write. I really enjoy when pieces are short but they still get their point across. |
 no.peace.los.angeles 2006-04-02 . chapter 1Well, that last line is certainly effective. It's very sad. Keep writing! :) |
 Adaku 2006-03-31 . chapter 1Short...but I really like it. Well done. Anyway, keep up the great work! ^^
~Water*healer |
 kaylajac 2006-03-30 . chapter 1Wow...I like this. I really, really like the imagery in the beginning and that abrupt change near the end. Good job. |
 darkened1 2006-03-30 . chapter 1 (too lazy to sign in) Soo... you get drunk/sick when you think of your loved one who isn't there. We call that annerexia hunny. He will not think you're attractive when you're skinnier. Why? I don't know. Good poem though, i liked the sick twist at the end where she's actually alone. |
 Every Thought 2006-03-29 . chapter 1Very interesting...I was searching around on "Just In" for some poems and found this. It's short, which is fitting, and both the entrance and ending leave the reader with chills. Wonderful work.
Every Thought |