*claps* I like it! Its lovely and simple and works well!

i love how, in the first two stanzas, the first and third line are full rhymes and the second and fourth are slant rhymes. I was a bit disappointed to find that wasn't the case with the last stanza, which makes it seem like the slant rhymes in the first two were a "mistake", or the last one you just copped out on. try editting it to make an interesting slant rhyme at the end. It .is. the theme you began with, after all

Great job on this poem, its very good. good rhyme and good wording. i think this poem has lots of truth in it and it touches the soul. wonderful job, keep it up!

Short but perfect I love all of the lines

An obscure message is often hidden in the unintentional words of a sentence. Never have to look if you know what to look for. Reis'Dem'Naca

I like that one..In english class, we need a poem done by someone other than ourselves... I think I will use yours.. :)