The first bit, before the actual story started, reminded me of a history textbook, and while I'm all for history textbooks...not in my leisure reading, please. ;) I dunno, it just seemed like you dumped a whole bunch of information on us at once, is all.

Update soon...This is really good.

Awesome.

Wow, this is so good.

I think this is awesome so far, keep up the good work.

wow...that this is great story so far. I really want to know who it turns out.

Though, you do have some grammer mistakes here and there, but that can be fixed by revising. It's ok, i'm not as good with grammer myself. ^^

~Water*healer