*sighs* So, so true. Thank you for the review, by the way, and I'm glad someone likes it ^_^. On the paragraph thing, you are most certainly right, but I've found in my reading that sometimes little slips are made to...what's the word? Humanize? By running some dialogue with another characters, I tried to give the impression that they cut one another off. I may not have made it work, but practice makes perfect!

Laters,

KD

I really liked this piece. It was erotic, yet romantic and meaningful. The words seem handpicked. Everything means so much. I really like this, I hope you write more short poems like this. Less is more. =P

wow...

steamy and erotic, I really liked it and was feeling it :)

good job.

I like the last five lines the most. This is really cool and beautiful. Thanks for the review ^ ^

Intresting... I like it a lot!

~Black and White Dreams~

I can see why you rated it M. But considering many teens have knowledge of sex and **, you could lower the rating to T. I think that this poem was put together very nicely, not being on the perverted side of sex. I find that ellipsis near the end a little humorous, but I know that it doesn't mean to be funny. Anyways, good poem, and I look forward to reading your other works soon.

By the way, thanks for your review!

-Sam(uel)

hm...interesting and thanks for the review

hm...2 lovers.beautiful.