YAY! you got another reviewer. see I knew people would like it. it is like that movie biuld it and they will come, but its like write it and they will come!! (incoherent over exited babbling similar to the above continues.) Just thought I'd write some thoughs over what I thought of the story so far. *Smexy finished her homwework* woot! I like their love story what happens later ** me off. you know. I'm not going to say it so it doesn't spoil it for the other people.. anyways you should keep writing so you will get even more reviews!

Herm...I don't have much to say by way of critisism. I like your use of words, and I know your reasoning but it's a bit confusing at times. Ah well. I guess it depends on the audience you're going for. I love it. Oh by the way, I don't get the title of the chapter.

I like the flow of the story. You use beautiful vocabulary that makes your story seem sureal and unlike the others I have read on this sight.