this sounded like it was going to be really sad from the first stanza & stuff and in a way it kinda still is sad, but the third stanza lightening things up... this was well written tho...

...wow...just wow...

all your work is very powerful, this one is particularly striking. Not only is the subject matter refreshingly origional, but the rhyme and the meter are perfect. I read it aloud, it just sounds so cool! You have a few typos but nothing major, otherwise it's perfect.

Thanks for sharing!