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| Gypsy Pink 2007-05-09 ch 1, | abuseVery nice. It would be really cool if it was set to a song. |
| janajyo 2007-01-17 ch 1, | abuseThat is so cool! And in a way it does make sense. the only part that didn't as much was: "All else is a silhouette, and no more and no less" O_O Oddly enough I think this is my favorite poem of yours. :D I like your rythm! cool. JJ |
| Agent Firefly 2006-08-18 ch 1, | abuseI love the way you chose to make this rhyme. Also the little parallel phrases: "no more, no less," "it'll come, it'll pass"--they add to the conversational, imaginative tone of the whole poem. While it seems like a basic truth, the way you view the sky is different to me: as something that remains steady while the world turns under it. I usually think of it the other way around, so this is a fresh idea. Nicely written! |
| Pheobe Meryll 2006-05-17 ch 1, | abuseI love this! It's like a little kid's song but definately more meaningful - just a little musing on the sky, half philosophical, half poetic. Reminds me of my story "sky's edge," actually. I shall put this on my favorites list *clickety* keep right on writing dear! |
| Kahn the Hun 2006-05-15 ch 1, | abuseInteresting, It has a fun rythm. Not much else to say... LOL. |
| Princess-anna57 2006-03-31 ch 1, | abuseI wrote a poem like this once! Great job, I like it a lot. Write on! ~Anna~ ^_^ |