I was never a fan of swear words in poetry, but other than that this was ok. Try to add imagery to your work. You have a great foundation - your emotions - but you can add life to those emotions by describing them more. Right now you're stating your emotions. Try to add color and life to them. Great work. I always envy writers who can put words to their feelings so clearly and flawlessly. Keep writing, s.

Hello. I have not read your poetry in awhile, and I regret that. This is a great read, simple yet filled with so much emotions. I loved it! I like how you put a modern touch the japanese tradition of haikus...

Not bad, you followed the rhyme scheme meticulously. Rock on. =)