Short as you said, but has the possiblity of evoking so much from those four lines. I hope to see more from you!

Hm... interesting one-stanza-er. I like it (all of it was love; not a particular line this time) I likes it lots, but it seems like it was just kind of taken from a longer poem and pasted somewhere else; like it needs something before and after it. Otherwise, good work.

PF

O I loved these four lines! OH! how pretty but yet...freakyish. You know what I mean? Wow...I really liked them though...I got this image of this girl lying in her coffin, slowly dying by listening to the lines being told to her over and over again, and she know's that they are all just lies, so she just tries to ignore them, and drifts off into "sleep"

Loved this! and the picture it portrayed in my head, it automatically gave me a story to go with this that played. *keep writing* and thanks for the review! it made my day!! I've missed getting my "leila reviews" :D hehe.

Love you more then my beloved Oreo poptarts! and hey! guess what...

I WILL SEE YOU SOON!! YAYAYAYAYYAYAYAYA! AH! *:D* bye

~britney~

V. nice. I really adore the first two lines, they simply strike me as incredibly... I dunno. Vivid? I'm not exactly sure how to explain, but for some reason I find them very... Agh! I can't come up with a description! I'll settle for awesome. I doubt this is what you intended to convey, but I received the impression of a coffin being somewhere safe where you could curl up with a stuffed plushie and be shielded from all of the lies. This may have been just slightly influenced by my aching need for a nap that day... Anyway, marvelous and spiffing (as always).

(On another completely random note, BEHOLD THE POWER OF STANDBY as I continue a review I started almost a week ago.)

i like this.. kinda wierd and very cool

impressive how you say so much in such few words...I love it, keep it up.--pammy-

Pride and Prejudice is good (BBC fan, not new version).

I love the whole of this, the ending is so well done. I am feeling like this poem right now so it was easy to place into my life right now.

Keep it up.

Pride and Prejudice SUCKS! (Sorry.. my opinion kinda came thru there... my bad)

Thats really such a cool, clever lil bit of writing! me likies, especially the last line

"transparent lies" .. i like that lots.. not entirely sure why, but i do! ^_^

kw!

~wolfeh (3.59 in the pm)

Nice. I love short poems, especially the ones with deep meaning. Keep Writing!

Awesome poem, it really captured a feeling for me. Great job on it. And yes, Pride adn Prediguce is a great movie. Lovely poem.

Eff yes for Panic!

Eff yes for Pride and Prejudice!

Eff yes for these four lines!

=D

P!ATD rocks. and so does Pride & Prejudice. the poem is very interesting, except the last line doesn't quite fit. perhaps if you listened to another song somethingmight *pop* into your head. nice job.

WOW...the is wonderful, even though its only 4 lines it has so much depth and emotion, well done.

the last line is lovely. interesting concept. nice work.