Wow, this is deep. I have to read over it more to get it all. I like the ending, the last sentance. It gives a very content feeling. Peace in the war and happiness in the woe. A kind of light in the shadows. Great job (again). Keep writing!

God Bless

Wow, this is really good. If you just read it straight through, it doesn't really seem to make any sense. But then if you look deeper, there is a lot of insecurity in this person. I can't wait to see what happens next. Keep writing!

Well written. Are you planning on adding more to this? I liked the imagery that you used.

well written. the first person thing worked good for this piece. plus, i like the short sentence structure of the first paragraph.