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Cthulhu is an Awesome God 2008-02-26 ch 12, anon.	abuseWow. A very nice climax with one of the coolest and craziest fight scenes I've read in a good long while. It really reminded me of the Dan Dority Vs. the Captain fight from season three of Deadwood, with both combatants rolling in the mud and getting terribly messed up. I think an Unforgiven kind of sequel could be very cool. Possibly, one that could involve Clark Reeper. Anyway good job and we can discuss this later.
S.J.Olusanya 2008-02-23 ch 12,	abuseI've finally finished this story, congratulations on finishing it good job, although I don't know if you should make a sequel to it but still good job. I'm writing my third installment of my character and I was wondering if you could read one of my stories, mostly 'Trained 2 Kill' If it's not a hassle thanks S J Olusanya
Cthulhu Is An Awesome God 2008-01-26 ch 11,	abuseThat was an excellent climax. I loved the crazy battle in the carriage, and the way it led to the final battle with Manzo was nicely done as well. This is a very cool Western Story, and I'm looking forward to the conclusion, though I hope there's not any riding off into the sunset just yet. I remember you asking about a cross-over or something a while back, and as always, I'm quite interested.
Gimstan 2008-01-26 ch 11,	abuseEVIL! gr i hate cliffhangers.
Gimstan 2007-12-02 ch 10,	abuseI do not understand why this story does not have many reviews, i thought it was brilliant. i like the way you focus more on your characters then their surrondings, it makes it more of a character story. :)
Cthulhu Is An Awesome God 2007-11-28 ch 10,	abuseAnother excellent chapter. I've waited much too long for the conclusion to this awesome tale, and I'm glad it might finally appear. I liked the Good, the Bad and the Ugly reference too, and I'm wondering if there's some other references in the earlier chapters that I missed. Anyway, good job and I can't wait to see more.
Cthulhu Is An Awesome God 2007-06-07 ch 9,	abuseGreat to see you back in action! The Sepulcher chapter was very well done and the showdown with Jaquin was masterfully done, as well as the search for the True Cross and Durrant's madness. The only problem I could think of is that the fights being one and one seem a little less than the epic Samurai stabfests that I was sort of expecting. I'd kind of like to see Max carve his way through a whole mess of foes, with severed limbs and heads flying everywhere, but maybe that's coming up, and it's probably just a personal preference anyway. I saw your review of Clark Reeper, and it is good to have you back, Mr. Wescott. I can't wait to read more.
Cthulhu Is An Awesome God 2007-04-16 ch 7,	abuseThat was great fun to read, a real slash 'em up, as I suppose you'd call it. I think the concept is great, a ronin in the old west who rights wrongs and battles his own demons, a Clint Eastwood with a Katana. The whole thing about a ninja being with the bad guys was executed well, but the search for the True Cross seems a little out of place. What's a western tale about Samurais without some Eastern Mysticism. Maybe have Durrant looking for The Lost Cherry Blossom Jewel of Zheng He or something. The villains were delightfully diabolical, though a little bit too predictable in the sex department. This is a Western not a women in prison movie. Speaking of it being a western, a little more western slang would add to atmosphere greatly. Mentiong ferro was a nice touch, but have them talk about President Grant, the Civil War, and say things like 'I reckon' and 'son of a gun' and 'snake in the grass.' Also the Undertaker needs a little more development. He had a pretty creepy description, and I figured him for a necrophiliac or something equally bad, but you never went into much detail about him. Oh, and if you've ever played the video game GUN, the villain, a one-eyed giant of a man looking for a lost treasure, seems to be sort of a copy of Durrant. Maybe that was on purpouse, maybe not. But despite my comments, that was a great bit of hackey-sackey meets the Old West, and I can't wait to see Max give the rest of those varmints their comeuppance.
S.J.Olusanya 2007-03-12 ch 1,	abuseCool western fic, it has an ecstatic feel to it! By the way are you still writing Den of thieves because I'm reading it more than usual,
David McCallister 2007-01-17 ch 1, anon.	abuseExcellent story, when are you going to write the conclusion?
R.M.Whitaker 2007-01-06 ch 1,	abuse"As night fell and cold front met warm, mother nature displayed her awesome power as lightening began to cleave the distance between heaven and earth while thunder rolled across the plains like an angry stampede." As cool as that sounds, it is a bit of a run-on sentance. You might want to break it somehow. Or at least change the "while" in "while thunder rolled" to "and". Asside from that, and the absence of the word "had" in several places when speaking of the past, this story is extremely well-written! Your tallent far exceeds mine!
seventhchords 2006-12-31 ch 2,	abuseI felt that your characterisation techniques here were excellent, and the use of vocablary very apt. I really enjoyed the first two chapters, and will be looking forward to more!
Gespry-Locksley 2006-08-06 ch 1,	abuseI was caught off guard by the last name that you gave the deputy, Harrison Chidress,There is a last name very similar in the western states, Childress or Childres. That's very cool. Great Names for your characters.
greg0041 2006-04-06 ch 1,	abuseMr Westcott: Let me start by saying that I thoroughly enjoyed your story. I like the western / samurai amalgam. Personally, two of my absolute favorite time periods. I would have liked a little better description of Max. I don't remember there being anything about what our main character looked like. The other characters are quite vivid, but Max was lacking. I thought the dialogue could have been a little stronger as well. I liked the ending. I also enjoyed the humor with the coffee. You do a very good job of helping me see things as a reader. And I liked how you merged the storm with the coming of the villains. All and all, I liked it. keep up the awesome work. Greg

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