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| mistariapotter 2007-07-10 ch 1,  | abuseREALLY GOOD! |
| Marshie 2006-04-28 ch 1, anon. | abuseVery nice! You manage to introduce many key concepts to the story while beginning in the middle of everything. I like it quite a bit. |
| James Eyeklll 2006-04-06 ch 1, anon. | abuseAngels, demons, war, betrayal... how could it *not* be entertaining? -James |
| Lellida 2006-04-05 ch 1, | abuseAww, that is so sad! You conveyed the agony of being damned for ever so well, that I really felt so sad and hopeless for Ayman. Really, a great short story. Very powerful and impressive, but was easy to understand as well. |
| Jacob and His Dream Machine 2006-04-04 ch 1, | abusei loved this story. The angels and demons are fascinating characters, and always good fodder |
| Joe 2006-04-04 ch 1, anon. | abuseAwesome story Elise.As always keep reaching for that rainbow.Your stories get better each time you write. |
| Ravi 2006-04-03 ch 1, anon. | abuseI like the story. Uriel herself was very well written and in the end I can't help but feel sorry for her. She's the ultimate victim of circumstnace; a soldier sent to kill a former comrade so close that lines seperating duty and personal revenge seem to blur out of existence. I loved the transition, also. From being an emotional wreck unable to even speak of the attrocites commited on the battlefield to being a cold-line veteran; it was all very well done. |
| Sony_Mouse 2006-04-03 ch 1, anon. | abuseExcellent story, very chilling. I loved how you built up the world around the event, and created a character with enough moral conflicts to be truly intriging. The darkness to the story was also well written, an unhappy ending, is a happy ending for me. well done. |