I loved how you kept repeating "Just an ordinary day" in between the lines of your poem. It really adds depth and meaning to reading "between the lines". Nice approach. May inspiration be like a bubbling fountain, full of opportunity and never running dry...

-HgBookworm

Very interesting. You have a lot of compassion and fellow-feeling.

Critically speaking: I think the repition may have turned some people off to this poem. I tended to read just every other line after the first four or five. I've done this repeating thing as well - some people like it, some don't.

But you keep up the good work - that I can see so far.