how sweet! :p

you could only wish that all guys were like that.

:D

good first chapter, and good luck with the rest of the story!

:)

Oh this is lovely. SO pretty.

See, I knew that cliches could be done well.

It's gorgeous, really lovely. The style and pace are nice, and the story itself is very cute.

I suppose you could develop the characters a bit more... if I'm looking for criticisms.

It really is a lovely piece of work. Keep writing!