awesome

This is such a great story. It's a little rough around the edges but it's still great. Like I've said before you are an amazing writer. I just love all of your stories. I can't get enough of them. I hope you decide to continue this at some point. I noticed its been a while since you updated. Anyways, happy writing. :)

Damn! It was starting to get exciting!

Ok, this is an interesting story but having gotten to this chapter I notice two things.

1. You really, really need to either double check before posting or get a beta. There are missing spaces between words, words that aren't real like 'irrated' for 'irritated' or aren't used correctly etc. I think maybe you're also missing the correct key while typing. Such as a 'v' where a 'b' should be. 'Shuckled' isn't a word. 'Chuckled' is a word and what I think you were going for.

2. Your author's notes in parenthesis in the middle of sentences are kind of annoying and really detract from the story. It's a very clear break from the narrator's voice. You already do author's notes at the end of chapters so you can just add whatever you feel needs explaining there :)

Sorry if it feels like I'm flaming you but it's a nice story and mistakes like that could really turn some people off.

OHH MYY GODD! finish this please? (A)

This is good, you should continue it sometime!

GAH! you havent updated for 2 years and 6 months! ugh...not good...i have read your other two stories to the point where you have stopped and im freaking out because there is none left to give me my fix! ahh...i love your stories...please dont abandon me and bernard and varano and roscoe and kamau and jiya and sharif and me! we miss you!

13 desserts of you most fantastical disires,

Rayne

really great stories!

Very nice story. I really liked it. I hope everything will turn out ok though. With the hold Bernard's secret identity, and the hole Antino situation. I wander how long that secret will stay a secret though. lol

Hurry and update. _

Just marking my spot. _ But I really really do like it so far.

Very interesting. I like it so far. Just reviewing to mark my place.

Heehee... Leash fetish. I love Jessie, he's so cute - Yay! Your characters are so funny and cute. There are a few spelling and typing mistakes, nothing big though. This story is awesome so far!

Rock On, Peace Out

Oh, a dancer? In a gay bar I hope :p

I'm enjoying this, but I did notice some mistakes. It's really just a spellchecker thing though, and nobody's perfect, so I'm not going to be really harsh about them. I have picked 2 examples:

" I'm Bernard by the wasy."

"waited for the elecator doors to open"

It's not like they're major problems or anything though.

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Trunks

Okay, not much happened, but it was still a fine peice of writing!

Aw. That's sweet! But it draws the question, Why the hell are all the sweet, affectinet, hot men either gay or married? Life sucks for us single women. Ah, well, the strong survive and learn from obsticles they have to overcome.