This is easily the best story of yours that I have read. It does a good job of catching the giddy feeling of new love and the pain of loss. A little more in the transition between the Ellie scene and the Sarah scene (perhaps explaining Sarah a bit more, or just the way West is feeling before the shoot) would help, but not much. The end of the story is excellent!

Let me be the first to say that this is wonderful piece. You are a good writer. I hope you plan updating soon!