that was really good, I liked it and it was very true b/c I know you and it is true. I love you

I love the rhyme scheme. Though sometimes you lost flow from one pair to the next, it still works. This one is kinda jumbled...I can't really tell if it focuses on the fact the heart was broken, or the love for him, it kinda goes back in forth...There's a negative and positive flow in there that really doesn't mix well in my mind. Don't get me wrong, it's better than most of MY crap!

Heartfelt and honest; I loved ho you told your story in this style and format. Very well constructed. Keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.