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| Isabella22 2006-09-07 ch 1,  | abuseThis is really good! Awesome write! |
| Morbane 2006-07-15 ch 1, | abuseI don't think I could pretend that I fully understand the story here, but I feel as though you have very consciously avoided strong emotion, wanting instead to present an undemanding picture that can be studied critically. One thing I like is that nothing here seems superfluous, irrelevant. A polished picture. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2006-07-13 ch 1, | abuseNice diction with "amorphous" and "hand-sheared" - definitely add depth and texture to your poem. |
| the.pink.life 2006-06-22 ch 1, | abuseSimply gorgeous. This reminds me of pieces I read for my college's literary magazine. I love "like an unfinished photograph/of Woman." Beautiful in it's simplicity, and it's a thought-provoking image. Keep writing! :) |
| Jezsh 2006-05-24 ch 1, | abusebeautifully written. I love the abruptness of the last line. Flows like a dream. |
| Lucid Nonsense 2006-05-20 ch 1, | abuseInteresting and well written. Your writing is always very unique. |
| Oh fuck this 2006-05-12 ch 1, | abuseHmm. Well done, I think. Your formatting is different than so many others' that I had to stop for a moment when reading to wrap my mind around it. You know, you have to get that rhythm in your head? Anyway, good piece. I liked the last line, it rounded off the poem well. -Chris and Jonas and Owen |
| Ellerfru 2006-04-30 ch 1, | abuseVery interesting poem! It makes me think of the inevitable passing of time, which is a rather sad thought. In the first stanza I like the expression 'crowd-sanctioned beauty', it underlines the bitter character of this piece. |
| mezzie 2006-04-20 ch 1, | abuseagain, your writing is exquisite, your style and identity slip through to the words, and it is all so refreshing in a sea of other similarities... mezzie |
| Sunset Teardrops 2006-04-18 ch 1, | abuseThis is a sweet portrayal of truth. You choose effective words to present your insightful message. Thanks for the review on "Death." Arcangel Michael is the Angel of Death. ;) |
| diffident 2006-04-12 ch 1, | abuseThe last two stanzas were awesome. Well, the entire poem was awesome, but the last two stanzas were awesomex2. So very beautiful and thought provoking. marie |
| mistressKC 2006-04-11 ch 1, | abusevery nice imagery - easily relatable |
| ronshaberry 2006-04-07 ch 1, | abuseSleek and sophisticated, I would say. Beautiful and refined. |
| in theory 2006-04-07 ch 1, | abuseThere's an elegance throughout this, a snapshot of womanhood with all the necessary imagery. Very pretty, and with that suggested nibble of time underneath it all. |
| Moondog Dozier 2006-04-05 ch 1, | abuseThis has so much specific detail. It is rich in imagery, as the portrait is vivid. Very well developed. This really captures alot about an individual with no wasted words. Excellent write. |