Keep writing Talon! You speak the truth that so many are scared to, and that others cannot find the proper words to voice.

You are very philosophical in your poems, and I like it. I think sometimes, though, they feel a bit tiring, when the same sentence structure is used over and over, so maybe try mixing it up a bit? Repetition and parallelism are great, but you can have too much.

Wow, so much wisdom. I really like how you've tied the poem together - it's amazingly well done. Keep it up.

-Luma

Good wisdom, I like all the aspects in this - and I would have hated this had you not tied them all together as well. Great job with that...I dislike writers who try to do too much with a certian piece but this was wonderful. Keep it up, s.