Pretty much perfect.

I really like this story so far. Dune's story reminds me of Tarzan ;)

Listen, I know what you said about not wanting to rewrite anything, but I do wish you would write a sequel to this AMAZING story!

The discription in this chapter is SO clear! I felt like I was really there, watching it!

Thaks for suggesting this story! It is really exciting, I have to read on!

There were a few things that confused me. The main one is: when did the Queen tell Caitri to be careful, or give her instructions at all? I definitely missed that part-I even went back to read that chapter...
Also, sheep herd would be the actual group of sheep. Shepherd is the person who cares for the sheep. Maybe that's what you meant in your title?

Ack, I'm confused. Is she carried to the battle by magik or is she seeing the future? and what does this mean: "She felt something surge through her body and she screamed. Something was taking over, taking control. She remembered the queens hurried instructions and let it." Which queens instructions?

Great story. It's really captivating. The love part is a little weird tho but maybe that's just b/c I don't know enough history yet. It just seems weird that they'd fall in love so fast.

Good job! I thought the ending was a little rushed but, you did write 10! chapters which is a lot more then I've been able to do. Over-all I really liked the story.

Oh man! This chapter was even better! That was a wonderful story about Caitri's parents. The story between her and Riordan is so romantic too. This chapter was very well written too. And plenty clear and understandable.

Yes the magik definitely made sense. I really understand the battle scenes and the conversation. Very good chapter.

Ooh now I'm really intrigued. Is the princess his sister? If I were Caitri I would be jealous if I didn't know her. But that's just me. So many questions, I can't wait for them to be answered. This chapter was very well written, maybe add just a speck more description but I really loved it don't worry.

How romantic! Oh I loved this chapter. Such drama and passion. This chapter was great your writing style is simply unique.

What an amazing story! This chapter was wonderful. I love long chapters. The story was so expertly told it was amazing. I can't believe more people haven't come to this story. I love it.

What an adorable ending to this chapter. I can't wait to find out what the story is!

I like this chapter, it was a good way to see more of the relationship build up between the two characters. Though I'm not sure I've ever heard the terms Muirne or Coineach before. And I'm not all too clear on their meanings. It seems like Muirne is an affectionate name for a love, but what is Coineach? Loving this story -Cari-anne