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| Jezsh 2006-04-06 ch 1,  | abuseI like the piece, although it seems to contradict itself when you say you're walking on a wider street...then say you're walking on one just as narrow. It didn't quite click with me. So in that way it could flow better. However I like its mood and tone, and the way it's set out. Nice. |