hm... it's not very clear to an outsider, but I know how it feels when you just need to vent. it's pretty good. I think it could be clarified and perhaps shortened without losing much of itself, but hey it still works

Very well written.

You are very talented with poems and it's great to have someone like you around to make us non-poets feel as if poetry is actually worth it.

And in case that didn't make sense, I'll leave with a more simple phrase.

Good jobb; and keep it up!

I truly love you're writing style, it's very blunt, and you should be proud of that. Thanks so much for your encouragement!

Yes, a good poem. Very interesting to read. Well done.

Wow this poem is great because you didn't try and fix it to something it shouldn't be... If it's an angry poem let it be angry... If it's a happy poem let it be happy! I really like this one because I've thought about giving up a lot of times... Keep it up!

Oh wow, you have talent. I cannot write when I'm mad. Nothing comes out, well I mean minus **. This is exactly how I feel when I'm mad.

This poem pulls up a image of a caged bird, wanting to get out and fly away. Not sure if that was the picture you were trying to invoke, but it's interesting how you did that without mentioning a bird or a cage. Maybe I don't get out much hehe. Rhyming scheme is constant. Feelings of desperation to succeed in something but failure tearing down each attempt is quite prominent. Just my opinion though... the rhyming scheme seems to eat away at the fluid pace of the reading, like a bashed in bike wheel. This is in most case because of the length of the poem. Perhaps change it up a bit in the poem, like have some no rhyming stanzas, or different ways the stanzas rhyme...even the number of lines per stanza! Suprise the reader in reads like this to keep their attention! Good work here.

like a wall built up in her mind or something. great job!

A sad, yet beautiful poem. I like your style and it flows well. Good job!

Oh, I know that feeling well. Very nicely written, as usual. =)

i realy like this poem, one of your best yet! its one of the only long poems i actually quite like!

P.S by the way when reviewing, do criticize and i have given up cutting

instead of anger I feel more trappedness if that makes any sense, maybe the word I am looking for is fustrated, but good poem I must say

Heartfelt and honest; I can really relate to this, keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.

Wonderful poem - I especially like the repetitive "I can't."