I think that this is really good. Good idea for the plot...It makes it interesting. What was the time period for this story? Very twisty...not in a bad way, just I like the was unpredictable. You colud never tell where ou took the reader next...keep it up!

Hey Morike told you I'd review!I like this a lot and I basically told what I thought yesterday.Okay, now I'm going to read more of your lovely works!