Beautiful story. That's all I can say.

D Maranwe Telrunya

Wow... you don't see poetry like this very often. Awesome job!

*wipes off beads of sweat* Wow that was pretty long! Though long it's still really good, you're a talented writer! Nice detail and use of vocabulary. _ *Applaudes* Do you think you'll write more poetry? I wouldn't mind reading it at all.

Wow, nice rhyming scheme. Not boring.

wo0w! this is amazing! i luv this so much!

You have selected some very good words here, plus the page breaks separate your thoughts it’s kind of cool.

fantastic word choice and pacing, love how much attention you pay to detail.

uh... gee... i dunno what happened but i swear i just read and reviewed this... anyway... i will just repeat what i had said in the other one... *stands and applauds* i love it. great descriptions and wonderful vignette. really nice work. cheers-rabbit

Ha! I'm reviewing your story under your penname! Well, anyway,this s a really awesome poem. It really portrays the anguish of losing a lover and your to the fires of insufferble paranoid morons. Keep up the writing of which I am so -Jen

wow, the way you've written this is amazing! keep up the awsumness _cozza

Wow! That was incredible! The story was great of course but I loved the way that not only did you finsih every second line with a rhyme which is sometimes a challenge in itself, but all you have words rhyming within each line to allowing for the perfect flow to the whole piece. As for the ending- well tragic endings are usualy the most memorable anyway :) Anyway, excellent work, more like this please! :)

I loved the detail and storytelling in this. Well done.

Juliet.