hmm, this one is another beauty, as usual

"Can we die together, love? Kill eachother, is that fair?"
tugged at my heart, just a little.

Great poem.

I love the lyricism of this poem, the flow of it, is so beautiful. Your rhymes are gorgeous as ever and the story you tell is bittersweet and painful, yet powerful.

Lovely and haunting.

I like the repetition of the word 'beautiful'. I havnt written anything for ages and if i get out of this slump i hope it turns out this good!

Chilling, but I liked it. It has a nice rythmic beat to it.

Quite a creepy theme, which finished qith quite a jarring note. It does, however, mke you sit up and pay attention.Well written

I really like the rhyme scheme. I also like the "I want to die..."/"If I could die..." parts. Not too monotonous; it works just right.