Reviews for Conversation with a while

Reviews For: Conversation with a while

Elizabeth Bilberry 2006-04-27 ch 1,	abuse"Conversation with a while," an interesting idea I must say, time is a subject that can be written about so many different views but I like your take on it a lot. Reading this gets me thinking. EB
not sure yet 2006-04-10 ch 1,	abuseo, i love this! especially the second stanza and the fact that it started with tea and had boats, boats are so much fun...excellent language as well, just tastes so spring like and flows beautifully and i really like how a lot of the ending words sound together too, like eyes and surprise, from and squirm, smile while, scoops sentimentally loops...gain traning main think...i dunno, muchly amazingly awesome in mah opinion
White Tea and Ginger 2006-04-09 ch 1,	abuseI really like this. Beautiful imagery. 'I never saw the purpose of chaining aship to the sea, or why it anchors me;the quiet in generous scoops,' 'about walking away(while it's not raining)' 'crystal tadpoles that squirmlike the threads of thought behind your eyes.There is not much surprisein conversation with a while,' Pretty, delicate sounding.
Duck8 2006-04-08 ch 1,	abuseSeems slightly confused as you said but i do like the way it sounds and the imagery Go u :)
Aquafied 2006-04-07 ch 1,	abuseI have tea to drinkand time to make-lovliness I never saw the purpose of chaining aship to the sea, or why it anchors me;-it makes me feel like i am sinking (and this all makes me blow up about originalityyou are amazing and original. and i just read a poem from a line directly from a song title and i never can know if they knew or if we can write the same things over time and not know. but that is always a curiosity)
Isabella22 2006-04-07 ch 1,	abusethe rhyming seems a little forced. but other than that. Awesome Job!
breezy nostrils 2006-04-07 ch 1,	abuseinteresting. i really like the last stanza. and some really good metaphors and symbols. nice work.
Calligrapher of Hearts 2006-04-07 ch 1,	abuseI'm seeing the connection with time here - evolution, the diamonds transforming over thousands of years, etc - and I'm kinda sensing that you wish to make the best of time which is yours. Stirring stuff =o) xhXix
xHannahx 2006-04-07 ch 1,	abusestrange muddle is good. reflects the strangeness of time. i like "crystal tadpoles that squirm /like the threads of thought behind your eyes." gd stuff. Han.
Hax Rook 2006-04-07 ch 1,	abusewandered with and a fine result. wouldn't rate it top top top in terms of form, but the web woven is a great thinkread. : "i never saw the purpose of chaining a/ship to the sea, or why it anchors me;" and the piece follows suit.
youzi 2006-04-07 ch 1,	abusevery intriguing piece...you're right about it getting muddled but the complexities enhances the "visual" quality of the piece-and in any case time cannot be pinned down in tangible terms.i liked, in particular, the imagery in the 2nd stanza..."crystal tadpoles that squirm/like the threads of thought behind your eyes"...do keep writing :D
Faithless Juliet 2006-04-07 ch 1,	abuseThis is one of the best I’ve seen from you in a while. “I have tea to drink” that’s such a subtle way to start something out, it makes me think that you HAVE to sit down and drink that tea and stop moving while you do it. But once you start doing something how the hell are you supposed to sit down/take time out of your day and drink that damn tea. Life is such a vicious cycle. “And I need to think about escaping with my face to the wind.” Interesting; I could really feel the wind with this - like having water on your face and you go outside and get a nice gust. “I never looked at diamonds in that much depth” Diamonds are always fun to interpret - there rocks, you’re right but there pretty rocks (diamonds are a girls best friend) I actually think that that concept of diamonds=love is drilled into the heads of little girls everywhere and we expected it so much that I think it actually ends a lot of good relationships because of it. I hate to think that I’m the kind of person who would value something so trivial and ultimately dangerous when you walk the path of romance land, but still, I’m a girl, I have nice dreams of diamond rings in pretty black boxes. Dreams, being the operative word though. “Or why it anchors me” to be anchored is such a strong image for me; like being settled, and being contented (whatever that is) or just being safe in one spot. Like do you ever get the urge to keep going when you realize that you’ve been still for too long - like just standing in the middle of a crowd something’s going to touch you, move you, break you, I get too jumpy to ever really be anchored. “I have more to gain and plenty of training in making no main point” education makes us so dumb - that’s just my personal experience with it, but it does. I’m glad that I’m going to finish school, but I regret starting it - if I could go back I think I would choose to not go and experience all that I’ve experienced. I’m easier to understand as a student of life as apposed to an every-other-person in a classroom. Very well constructed, it really had some meat on its bones. You also mentioned Pocahontas in one of your other reviews for me (she‘s always fascinated me) but I saw that new movie “The New World” a few months ago and even though it has Colin Farrell in it (which is kind of a laughable oxymoron) it was really good. One of the better movies that I’ve seen recently. I also got that Joanna Newson CD: “The milk-eyed mender” and enjoyed it, it takes a while to get over her voice but your right her lyrics are wonderful. I saw King Kong last night to, and I didn’t like it (but that‘s another story) I totally have the day off today so I could just sit and chat the morning away but I should forward this to you already - well done. Wonderful. I enjoyed. Much love,Juliet.
Sunset Teardrops 2006-04-07 ch 1,	abuseYou created wonderful imagery and memorable symbolisms through your well-chosen words. Strange muddle, yeah, but very captivating.
Midnight Star Lights 2006-04-07 ch 1,	abuseGREAT JOB!

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