and it was the first line that rendered me speechless.congratulations - you wrote this really well and exposed all the feeling in it. brilliant work/

o, i love that beginning, it was enchanting and pulled me into the black hole of the rest of the poem, o so lovely, excellent job

'we always thought our silver lining glittered like goldbut when it rains, the sky can tell beautiful lies' i really love that... that's awesome. and i also like the last stanza... it's incredible.

beautitiful, beautiful, beautiful.

it's so regretful and such a torrent of fascinating ideas and imagery, but i think the second/last stanza is a bit overkill. i love the way you end the first stanza, the hourglass that "cut us down to size when the sand stopped falling." love the way you begin, love how you utilize cliches in a completely different way, providing insight and vivid emotion.

So many wonderful lines and images. It's truly amazing how you can create such lovely poetry from such painful events.

Very stark, vivid images. And quite beautiful, in a sad sort of way.