Reviews for Harvest with chisels

Reviews For: Harvest with chisels

Jolly Jeff 2006-08-20 ch 1,	abuse"Harvest with chiselschildren of new thinking whoare fished from a riverwith no memory of drinking." The difference between poetry and what you write is the difference between looking at an anthill and looking at a mountain. It baffles me that a mere human could write like that. P.S. That wasn't supposed to be (and wasn't--lol) poetic. I just couldn't think of another way to put it.
sketchingaCYNiC 2006-06-23 ch 1,	abuse"I would rather dip into unsure water and pour thought out at short notice, surely I don't need to know this." That was my favorite line. I really liked the first stanza, too. Very good imagery. This is an interesting idea -- "forces new sprouts to yield to rock that is pronounced rules." Loved the poem. I am adding this to my favorites! :D
Infinite Smiles 2006-04-22 ch 1,	abuseThis is awesome. Just AWESOME. I am at a loss for words.
mezzie 2006-04-15 ch 1,	abusegah! i love your final verse, it's perfect in every way. it's gonna be stuck in my head now i just know it... : ) mezzie
mizu no kokoro 2006-04-13 ch 1,	abusei like how you always have such a way with language, wonderful metaphors and imagery. great work! keep writing!
AllyCred 2006-04-13 ch 1,	abuseInteresting, i like the twisting of the words, very eloquent!
not sure yet 2006-04-10 ch 1,	abusethis screams of high school that place sucked clever little poem though, i rather liked it, well done
Chemically Induced 2006-04-10 ch 1,	abusei am thoroughly impressed. your writing has a way of being beautiful, refrshing, and evocative. and here, also deep, and meaningful. the last stanza is outright magical. i enjoyed the sound work of "see how a flock of white threadroots/ can erode a road with their/ determination." masterful. i love the message broadcasted so poetically as well. i hate conformity, oppressive encouragement to learn the same , tired things. i would also, "rather dip into/ unsure water/ at short notice." i love it. and this is goign on my favorites. :) never stop. love, c.induced.
Faithless Juliet 2006-04-09 ch 1,	abuseEducation is not the paddle ideal to haul the teenaged minutes further afield - (Is afield one word of two? I think it‘s two, but it could work as one) I’ve never really been comfortable with the idea of education [it‘s something that needs to be done but I think it‘s turned into more of a gimmick then anything else] I mean I don’t know how it is over there but it cost anywhere from twenty - forty thousand dollars per year at a university (and that‘s like what both my parents make in a year) so it’s like - I don’t even know what to do, not eat and live in a box just so I can get a piece of paper that says that I know something “worth knowing!” The reference to TEENAGERS makes me think of high school - the dark ages - and how no one really goes to school to learn it’s more of hanging out with friends /cell phones/ who broke up with each other/why? I like learning, but not like that! Rock that is pronounced rules. (HELL, YEAH!) Roots pick a hole through my roof; (The imagery here is very strong, probably the strongest scene imagery in the whole poem. It makes me see rundown shacks or shanties in the woods; kind of Oliver Twist and you writing poetry with a feathery quill while moss and plants are growing down from the roof all the way to the floorboards.) This horizontal mind is open to plantation. (I like you use of “Plantation”) it feels like such an American word “Plantation” it’s very civil war-ish but I guess there are plantations all over the world. Clever can be quite proper in its own bored eyes. (We all think we‘re something we‘re not.) (Children of new thinking who are fished from a river with no memory of drinking.) That seems so fantastical - like that’s an idea that you should write a story about, plucking people from waves and teaching them to forget everything they instinctively know for things that have no place in the real world - there’s things that you need to know, that will help your life, and there are things that you mind needs to know, to make you feel superior. Well done. Juliet.
Aquafied 2006-04-09 ch 1,	abusethe whole thing reminds me of a grammar school are fished from a riverwith no memory of drinking.-i liked the endingkept me thinking.
xHannahx 2006-04-09 ch 1,	abusehmm. i really like this, it rings true with a lecture i heard last night by Prof. Richard Dawkins, who was saying that children should not be manipulated or brainwashed... anyhow, i like this, especially the first and last stanzas, gd stuff gd stuff. Han
Calligrapher of Hearts 2006-04-09 ch 1,	abuseReminds me of Another Brick In The Wall. Powerful! xhXix
breezy nostrils 2006-04-09 ch 1,	abusei like this one. and i don't see grammar problems, but maybe it's cos I just woke up a little while ago, and it's 8am on a sunday morning! anyway, I couldn't send you that rambling or my bad singing through e-mail. so you'll have to get that from me through msn. have an awesome rest of weekend, k?
gitana 2006-04-08 ch 1,	abuse"Clever can be quite proper in its own bored eyes." That line is enough to guarantee this poem a great review--though the rest of it is also amazing, as always. I only saw one grammatical mistake: "children of new thinking that" should be "children of new thinking who." But really, who pays attention to grammar in poetry? =) hg
braindead1345 2006-04-08 ch 1,	abuseI like it, and its twisting truning, um, words. anyway, its awesome!

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